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The bone chimes have rung
Ashen memory swivels
A naked remorse

All we have left inside us
Belief in ourselves

Words to display it
Words to portray it at all
Leave a blank for you

Asking still for more
To take this freedom away
Revealing it all…

Revealing the truth…
Capping existence…
Revealing minute…

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The following comments are for "“Extracentrical Reallocations: Perspective Shift #1: The Fall, As It’s Not Enough”"
by ghostpoisonsturgeon

"Capping existence…"
good to read you again, ghost. glad to have you back... and what a stellar collection this is too...

I love "naked remorse", nothing more painfully honest than sorry, hu? ... read this feeling that as poet-self searched for Ultimate Truth all he found were successive smaller truths, onion-skin layers of what looked like the real deal but on closer inspection truned out to be deceptions, tarted up and given a title... so that even langauge is a lie, even attempting to tell the truth obscures the real truth some how...

and the real truth is...? maybe we'll never know. I certainly won't, I'm not that enlightened... very Zen, these, thank you for them.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: May 30, 2008 )

hey thanks
this is actually the first thing i've written in about a month... havent been feeling it lately, you know. glad you enjoyed it. hope to be around here more often

( Posted by: ghostpoisonsturgeon [Member] On: May 30, 2008 )

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