BlackBird
by ttdavis (Member) - published: May 8, 2008
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The heartbeat of my son
has melted on the street
dark, gray and molten
mixed in with the concrete
while cops lookin for trouble are hittin the beat

The heat
Defeat
I just can't take
my heart feels like
it's just gonna break
in the wake
of the quake
that put our lives at stake

No debate!
No time to wait!

Must act now!
Don't know how!

To help him see
what's really going down
there's only one King David
and he didn't get shot
He stood alone
and killed Goliath
with only faith and a rock

The lies
Deceit
and fallacies
are nothing but the enemy

It's killing me
To see my seed

Willingly...

Drink from the fountain of death
and if he keeps going
There will be nothing left
but a pitchfork, two guns, a flag but no light
and a dead BlackBird
Leaning to the right.

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"Let the brain stumble from its hiding place, From it's cellblock, to the edge of oblivion to come to itself..."

--Safe Subjects - Yusef Komunyakaa

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by ttdavis

Must address a few things...
You'll have to wiki King David (Barksdale) to really understand this. This poem relies on gang terminology heavily and compares it to the truth. Unless you know someone in a gang or know the intimate details of this particular gang, some of this might be difficult to understand.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: May 8, 2008 )

you are the key & the light!
Today the influences that surround our young seem to be far more powerful than we. And when they are "out there" trying to define themselves...these influences can be so intoxicating! Especially to a youth who's life, up until the point of their acceptance of the evils, have been quite the opposite. Good girls love bad boys. Good boys love the really bad girls! Or atleast we think that we do. Only time will tell if the truth will be recognized and accepted by them.

If you are in danger; your family in danger; your child in danger then I'm sure you know that at this point something drastic is needed. Saving a life requires standing against the grains of death. A very difficult misson indeed but, he's worth it isn't he?

I moved from Virginia to New Hampshire where I've been living for a little over three years. My 16 year old daughter, (three years ago of course), lived in a very nice two bedroom house. Nice yard; well maintained property; good landlord and a doctor's office right next door. He was a very nice man. And directly across the street from me....A crack house; the home of a heroine abuser; and a dealers house who company came and went so much; who was outside all the time that I didn't even want my daughter outside. I did not see this when I moved. So...how did our lives turn out there?....As my "excuse" to handle events that...tore me up while living there..Istarted "associating" with these less possitive influences. I went from being a woman who cooked, cleaned, helped with homework, had weekend sleep overs every single weekend, (anywhere from...2 to 6, 7 kids or so.) Had a good job at Q.V.C to a..."thing" who's only waking thought was how to spot another rock! (if you don't know what a rock is it's slang for crack) My family, (daughter), suffered so much! She went from an A/B student to all F's! Crying at night in bed because I no longer had time to read her a story....on and on..

My solution?...New Hampshire! She's now a junior in a school she loves and even though we are still handleing issues that are most definitly causing turmoil in our lives...atleast I no longer ignore her...atleast she doesn't have to fight for my attention and me deciding to give it to the evils.

I'm not saying that you should pack up and move but it's just an example of the extremes that are sometimes nessesary. She and I are both lucky. I got my priorities to her well being and my ability to "deal" back and she got back the mother that is willing and ready to go through the hardships that being a teen in this day and age demand from her. And for them with the choices out there...I know we can't "run away" but I just think that atleast I don't have to suject her to living right in the middle of it.

I know your hurting and I truly pray for you to find the answers you need to get you and your son through this. You are who is now the "logical" one who is responsable for not only your way of dealing with this but also responsable for the his ability to make better decisions...make them for him!

I wish you the very, very best!

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: May 8, 2008 )

Thank you!
Tammi,

Thank you so much for you words of strength and wisdom. This is very real for me and we are making plans. I am so glad you were lead to share your story. My family will make it through this. Writing this out and moving others to feel something from my words, is very therapeutic for me. I hope that doesn't sound too dark, but evoking emotion through poetry is my goal.

Thank you and I wish you all the very best also!

Thais

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: May 9, 2008 )

10 things plus 1
I learned something else I can add to my list of 10. As Einstein once stated the most powerful force in this world is compound interest -- gauging this poem I would say the most powerful influence in the world is peer influence.

In my youth I also followed a very distructive path, ran the dark streets, hung with the dead-beats. Of course the slang is all different now, but not so much that this doesn't hit a little close to the bone for me.

Good pen, keep it coming.

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: May 9, 2008 )

well done
"...evoking emotion through poetry is my goal.."

To be honest I have not read any of your works here. I apologize but...if your other pieces are honest and detailed in expressing your "from the heart" point of view, then I have no doubt that you succeed in reaching your goal well.

Will be looking back into your history of works...if that's ok with you.

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: May 9, 2008 )

1 thing
Thank you BWOZ, you're right. Peer pressure is the biggest thing in our world right now. There are worse things I know, but I always have hope when an adult man tells me how much craziness they were involved in and yet they are still here.

Thanks for the comment.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: May 10, 2008 )

No problem
Tammi, I appreciate your feedback once again. Of course you can read back through my other works. I don't think they displayed the same type of honesty that this one and Slow Burn did.

Seems like I always need an inspiration and the poem is just there. It's taken me a long time to find inspiration. Just ironic I had to find it this way.

I'll also look through yours as well.

( Posted by: ttdavis [Member] On: May 10, 2008 )

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