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in
its teeth I
lie still,
knowing that
to fight
only
cuts me
deeper.

at the eye
of this storm
I bleed,
lonely,
watching
life going on
without me.

the archaeological
marvel
of me and my
petrified heart -
me,
the stone,
frozen in time.

I wander,
I wonder,
I wish; and I tire
of desire,
wanting only
not to
want
anymore.

so lonely,
so empty
I can't help
but feel that
I am a meteor
crashing
very far
from home.

I crave change
yet revile it;
with care
you
preserve me
as I am -
left behind.



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The following comments are for "meteor."
by Gothflower

meteor
But a meteor is always on the move. Only time it stops is when it crashes into another object.

Your poem has all the longing of renaissance poetry. There's a feeling of going in circles while holding the legend (map) in your hands.

Good intro to your work. Look forward to more and welcome to lit in these times of rebirth.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: May 8, 2008 )

poewhit
Felt a lot of loneliness in the words

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: May 13, 2008 )





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