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Before I slept, I watched
while she cooked in her kitchen,
how a strimpet of hair flailed down
in front of her face wild.
She never saw me smile over melted
cheese sauce
or
cauliflower propped up in a colander pot.

Later, I slept walked with the wind
until it died down to a low moan,
curled my stiff-necked head back
on the sleigh bed headboard
and listened
to her snore
which she denies.
I could not focus my prayers because
God kept interrupting me in my virtual hayfield.
She screamed
in her dream she never remembered,
not a fright but surprise then quiets
and flails her arms
once.

Back in the kitchen in the cupboard
she shakes the fake vanilla pudding
in front of me asks me
if
I want some. Yes, I guess,
I don’t want to stir tapioca. Too much
sawdust on my shirt.
In my mind I think rhubarb
pie and she reads me
aloud with her rhubarb crisp
comment I didn’t see coming- but
I should have because
It happens all the time.

She asks how long I sat on the porch
and watched the lightning show
and I said
till the dog pulled my sleeve; he
couldn’t tell time
and there
was no rhyme to
the strikes
high up
in the troubled sky.

But it was two
and the rain ran over the
gutters, escaped
to the pond which never runs full.

You would not believe it if
I told you I tiptoed myself to bed,
but it can’t be proven
otherwise.

Sometimes she feigns serenity
when I sink down
under cover
of dark.
I know though
she is remmed in, for her
restless feet are still
like cattails in a warm sun and there
is an even hum.
In her breath
You won’t find some words
in the dictionary
and others you do cannot be
defined.
Sometimes, night needs to stay awhile.

Koo Koo Ka Choo.



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The following comments are for "Peachy Keen"
by williamhill

Koo koo Ka Choo
Somehow this ending reminds me of the old Beatles song that deals with the falling out they had with their Hindu Guru Maharishi Jai? Maybe I'm just trippin, eh? Come together, right now, over me? Can everything be over me, about me, always me? Or is it just me?

See there you go again getting me all worked into your words and awesome poetry here. There is a tapestry at work here that is too me, multidimensional in variables and depth....if that makes any sense to you? It does to me. Of course I tend to read most poetry as if I am looking at a surrealist painting...my thing, my genre of choice, and thus my tainted subjectivity always seems to get in the way.

Love what you have done here...love the feel, the the feel and flow...particularly the flow. Excuse me if my interpretations, my critiques, my way of speaking make about as much sense as does my way of looking through much of how I approach all life and reality a la surrealistically-speak.

Anyway, in simple terms, in humble terms, I the reader am honestly trying to tell you that I have read your poem, I have seen it, I have enjoyed it...and I thank you for posting.

Blessings from my Tibetan Buddhist heart to your Christian one;-) A heart is a heart is heart....wouldn't you say? Though in these many lives shared by all sentient beings some hearts sometimes beat fiercer than others, in the end, all come to the same stillness.

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: April 21, 2008 )

I am a walrus...
oh yeah...?

May I say again, cool poem, Charlie;-)

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: April 21, 2008 )

of rem and rhubarb
Charlie-
A highly enjoyable read.

My Mom used to pick fresh rhubarb from her garden for primo custard pie. Induced smile.


Ahh..homemade tapioca..Indeed.

a magical tour...through berried fields..

imagining,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: April 21, 2008 )

poewhit
A woman in her kingdom, the home

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: April 23, 2008 )

We Are All Together
Strangely, I kind of agree with Lena-

Koo-koo-ka-chew-

Beautiful, (as I expect when I read your words)

Does she know how beautifully you see her? Many wonderful turns of phrase, but the most that comes back to me is the love with which you hold her. Truly lovely-

-best, Elizabeth

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 25, 2008 )

thanky keen
Lena, thanks for your kind comments and gentle critique. I am sorry for not being around lately or commenting. too busy life.
charlie.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: April 25, 2008 )

Charlie, peachy keen
This is right there alongside shattered field, Shattered Field and fridge notes...There is an overlayer of something here, as if some spirituality were showing through a diaphanous physicality, if that makes any kind of sense...As if (this) reader accessed something not quite intended for viewing...
But what I like best is the comfrt this brings, the comfort it culls...

Thank you!

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: April 25, 2008 )





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