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Once upon I saw your smile
And knew not the effects it had.
I fell in love for just a while;
No more feelings that were sad
Passed through my soul, or yours.
I felt like Byron on his highs,
No more poems that were bores
But songs that sounded as from the skies.
I feel I must repraise you now-
Your gentle features, enpowering light-
But how?
I fell dumbfounded with certain might
To say that even Shakespeare will waylay
With flowers, sonnets, and perhaps a play.

The Lord~

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The following comments are for "I(With Pleasure)"
by Lord Alexandre

If a poem is about image, this doesn't cut it. Your rhythm and rhyme are both good, but there is no image, no overall or underlying theme or motif. And the sentiments are, excuse me, cliche. See for poetry guidelines.

( Posted by: Cybele [Member] On: February 28, 2003 )

I would like to first point out poetry is not always about image. On my sentiments being cliches, please give me examples in published poems where mine are used and I shall agree. My theme, I thought, was how much I care for my love and how she makes me feel. Perhaps you missed that and would care to tread over the poem once again.

The Lord~

( Posted by: Lord Alexandre [Member] On: March 3, 2003 )

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