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Old Poem 1997
by gamblerman (Member) - published: April 13, 2008
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NIGHT

What is this fuzzy
cold ball whose silky
skin is strength
indeed,

Whose dark expanse is
set to rescue,
these twinkling stars
that stumble in
their sleep.

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by gamblerman

when I post
my old stuff, I do so with a certain sense of trepidation, with the knowledge that it isn’t quite as good as I thought it was when I wrote it… that said, I do post old stuff when I come across it, as some of those poems are significant sign posts on the journey the writer took to the creative place they are today, and I enjoyed this poem on that level…

of the poem itself, the second stanza appeals most to me, the mixture of textures in the first left me a bit confused; how is something fuzzy AND cold AND silky…? but then, the night is multi-facetted, right? and full of conflicting and contrasting elements, the shape and texture and consistency of which are always in a state of metaphysical flux… still, something about the image jarred with me… though I’m willing to admit the fault’s probably mine and not the poem’s…

second stanza I really liked, particularly “set to rescue”, because it allows the reader a glimpse of something they don’t see very often: a nurturing darkness… a beautiful, maternal image. thanks for sharing.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 13, 2008 )

Uh....
Hi Auld....

Your comments are always welcome.

Poetry is about clash on so many levels....that's why it's so precious.

Think comet for the first stanza...

The second think spiritual salvation.

Now I wish I had kept quiet.

M

( Posted by: gamblerman [Member] On: April 13, 2008 )





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