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Hi folks, I've got a bit of a ghazal for ya.



Eyes scan about the room.
Wrappers on the floor
Ancient soldiers and beams of light.
Wrappers on the floor
The upcoming battle they shall fight.
Wrappers on the floor
But which desire shall they consume?
Wrappers on the floor

Battle raging for an eon
Wrappers on the floor
No democratic election
Wrappers on the floor
Candy gives way to protection
Wrappers on the floor
What does your child spend 89¢ on?
Wrappers on the floor


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In a post-apocalyptic world where the western hemisphere is ruled by the iron fist of the Toys 4 Us Company, only one man will have the ball bearings (rides a mechanical ostrich) to stop them.


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The following comments are for "Wrappers on the Floor"
by OmegaGambit

that's a wrap
first I saw the “wrappers” as maybe sweet papers, cans, popcorn tubs, the usual sort of thing left on the floor of cinemas by careless audiences… then I thought maybe “wrappers” had more sinister connotations, could be condoms on the floor of a porno theatre, could be body bags left on the ground after a war…could be “wraps” containing drugs…

cinéma-vérité? art imitating life? life imitating art? voyeurism on the evening news? Exploiting tragedy for entertainment? …

I like things that aren’t obvious.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 13, 2008 )

Explanation of the wrappers.
First off, thanks for reading and commenting. As for an explanation, the two wrappers are a bit vague, but the original meanings are, in fact, condom (Ancient soldiers - Trojan as described) and a candy wrapper (beams of light - Starbursts as described).

The piece itself is about growing up (from candy to condoms) with the last non-repeated line focused to parents, commenting on their possible ignorance on the transition.

I did realize that the poem can be interpreted in a few way, which I like because whatever the reader needs to get from the poem, then that person can.

One last note I suppose, the inspiration for the poem itself actually started as an idea for a photograph.

Well, thanks again for the comments

( Posted by: OmegaGambit [Member] On: April 13, 2008 )

Wrappers on the floor...
Isn't it funny what catches a child's attention.

I'M AM EMBARRASSED! I read your piece as an observance of sorts. "...candy gives way to protection..." I should have caught that! I interpreted it as a maturity from youth to manhood. I made my first comment and then re-read your piece to further understand..."but which desire shall they consume..." in an attempt to make certain I comprehended before a comment I was going to make, then read others comments on my way back down to the bottom. Holy S@#T! I must be thick! I didn't delete it because of your statement about it being interpreted in various ways, so I'm leaving my opinion on. What ever was the reality in your mind when you wrote it, it is a valuable piece in that it has so many interpretations to offer.

Thanks, Tammy

( Posted by: TAMMYHENDRIX [Member] On: April 13, 2008 )





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