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My heart expanded with the sky
and burned with the roses on the lake.
My eyes changed colour
with the incarnations of the moon.

I slept next to the lake
and dreamt the roses
changed colour in the sky
and the moon burned
on the water

I woke up plunged
my hand in the lake
and witnessed its
entrance through the sky
reflected in the water.


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whoever you are come forth these are the days that must happen to you.


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The following comments are for "Lake"
by icemoon

lake
hi penelope thanks-the poem is about the interpenetration of illusion and reality and the boundaries of dreams-if that makes sense-anyway thanks again.

( Posted by: icemoon [Member] On: April 14, 2008 )

"My heart expanded with the sky"
worth the read for that line alone. love when poets properly ascribe infinity to the heart, and itís beautifully expressed here. thank you for sharing this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 16, 2008 )

Lake
This has a rhythm like a pounding heart, and flows as seamlessly as swiftly moving water through smooth, rounded riverstones.

I love the perspective at the end, of plunging your hand through the sky.

Very, very nice.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: April 17, 2008 )





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