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Renown for what he’d long ago begun,
John tried to take a step back from his life
and figure out just what it was he’d done
to be “The Orchid Man,” with orchids rife.

It must have been at his first orchid show
he’d never bought himself one before that
but how it grew to this he didn’t know,
as he looked about his orchid habitat.
That seemingly innocent epiphyte
was now an addiction he couldn’t fight.

His newest hybrid bloomed this month from seed!
He brought the first blooms in at night to gawk
and kept one fragrance-close from this new breed.
He spoke to them and knew that they could talk,
revealing if they liked the light where grown
or if they got the right movement of air.
Even how wet their roots were could be known,
without touching the pot whatsoever.

Yet they were also speaking with their scent --
barely an aroma, almost a hint,
but some olfactory accomplishment --
that first seemed cilantro-like, then like mint.
Then, as if they were changing the topics,
they breathed a fruity spice of the tropics.

He’d spent the whole day tending to their needs --
grooming, fertilizing and watering,
repotting and cultivating more seeds.
… guessed he’d do this till he was dotering.

John wasn’t sure it should merit concern,
but he’d been bitten (a bit more than most),
and was not the best person to discern
the extent to which he’d become engrossed.
(So they’d have better water than he drank,
he’d just arranged for a filter system,
requiring pump and separate storage tank –
reverse osmosis so he could mist ‘em.)

The orchid bug seems a permanent catch:
No twelve-step program gives it a mention.
There’s no pharmaceutical orchid patch.
Betty Ford’s doesn’t give it attention.

“Could their pheromones be affecting me?”
He pondered as he sniffed his floral fix.
“Could I be maneuvered, just like the bee,
through vivid, hypnotic geometrics?”

Just for a moment, he thought it was odd
that he’d been such an easy pushover --
not tricked by Triphid or replaced by pod,
yet his whole life had been taken over.
Since none were carnivorous, he’d assumed
that he was safe, but he was all consumed.



------
True style
is not a function of
financial circumstance.




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The following comments are for "Little Shop"
by poeteye

making scents
Started reading this thinking John would play the role of creator and destroyer. But I was wrong.

Love the role the orchids play in this piece: Ultimate seducers. Not so different from the role our deities play. They seduce us with promises of beauty and then lure us into complacent servitude without ever having promised us more than a promise.

That's my half-witted take on this, in a nutshell...

This is an amazing story poem, Sir Eye (aka James). Makes me wish I'd thought of it. Set my brain a'working overtime but anything that comes of it will only be a pale version of what you inspired me with. Think I'll just stick to me misery...

By the way, are you still performing in LA? I live along the LA/OC border so I'd have no excuse to miss it.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: April 1, 2008 )

orchid deities
Good take on the tale! You know, in Victorian England, orchids were considered too explicit for the "delicate sex." You totally got "lure," though I never said it.
I tried recently to get on the radio in L.A., but, after months of effort, was told I was "close" and would only need a DJ to champion me. For now, I've stopped pursuing that. April is National Poetry Month and I thought the "Poetry in Motion" show sponsored by the LA Metro Rail, might be something I'd try to make.

Of course, The Santa Barbara International Poetry Festival will be in full swing so it may be hard to arrange time for both. APRIL FOOL~!

Santa Barbara sucks for poetry events this year. Santa Ana has more open art venues than Ventura. It's a desert here up north, until you get to San Francisco.
It probably doesn't help that our local poet laureate thinks poetry is primarily a therapeutic tool.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: April 1, 2008 )

a cut above
you know, your posts always make me feel like dribbling idiot. but that’s alright, you write lucidly and originally and consistently raise the bar for all of us here…

orchids have got a fascinating mythological history, definitely fertile ground for poetry… was reading somewhere that Ruskin called ‘em “prurient apparitions”, definitely descriptive, if not entirely complimentary… though I think that probably says more about Ruskin than it does about orchids…

but hey, this piece isn’t just about botany, right? it says something too about the nature of obsession and (self?) deception… or at least that’s the track my wayward brain wandered down…

thanks for an- as always- provoking and stimulating read. best to you.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 1, 2008 )

now I get it
Oh, Poeteye
I wondered why
You went and changed
Your title

Intelligent
Design was fine
In fact it was
Delightful

It goes to show
That I am slow
I suffered much
Confusion

‘Til friends, you see
Spelled out for me
The Roger Corman
Allusion

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: April 5, 2008 )

beautiful
This is so .. you. I'm so happy I did a web search a few years ago which makes me appreciate this brilliant bit of writing all the more. Thank you .. and I feel blessed to be able to read this treasure.

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: April 5, 2008 )

Intelligent Design
Shannon, or anyone else, did you like the original title better than Little Shop?

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: April 6, 2008 )

Web search
What web address was it that enhanced your appreciation of this piece, Penelope?

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: April 6, 2008 )

title
Think the original title was better because there was creationism in it. The new title of course reminded me of "Little shop of horrors" - which gave it a comical bent that is more distracting than helpful. However, it's your story.

My two cents anyway...

***

Monterey and Santa Cruz are also good places for poetry. I enjoyed readings there because there is no need to impress big city literati.

Santa Barbara is obviously closer to me but I have never been to a reading there. Might run into Oprah and make a lesbian reference. She might send the gay mafia after me...

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: April 6, 2008 )

web search
why this one of course!
ORCHIDS!

jeez I hope all that hoopla url jazz worked ...

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: April 6, 2008 )

Thank you for the unsolicited ...
I really wasn't fishing for a free advertisement, but it was very sweet of you to link me up, Pen.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: April 23, 2008 )

Popeye
It's a great site! I'm so glad I went there way back when because it brought me more insight.

( Posted by: Penelope [Member] On: April 24, 2008 )





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