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Commander
by IcicleIcicle (Member) - published: March 25, 2008
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Category - Poetry
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It’ll be a happy coincidence
They say
That day when
It finally happens

I can’t help but
Agree
What is love
If it cannot transcend

Space and time
This realm and some
Light years

If not in this life
Well in the next
But we can bet on this
Like high rollers

It’s gonna happen
Sooner or later
‘Cause it shines
Brighter than
All of the Milky Way

You and I
Are like those stars
Shining sweetly
As we consume ourselves

All that matters
Came once from
A star

So if you read me
Out there
Come on in
Commander


------
"If you get a feeling next time you see me
Do me a favor and let me know
'Cos it's hard to tell
It's hard to say
Oh well, okay"
Elliott Smith



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The following comments are for "Commander"
by IcicleIcicle

second star to the right, and straight on till morning
Seems to me you are putting your fate in someone else's hands. It's true that happy accidents are the best accidents but sometimes causing them is half the fun.

Poem reads like you might already have someone in mind. Is it Terence (kilgoretrout)? He's such a manwhore...

Cool Poem.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: March 26, 2008 )

Icicle...
Soooo uhhhhh Icicle whats the chances that a guy like you and a girl like me can make magic happen?????

Just thought I'd step up to the challenge of your poem...

In all seriousness I did like this and I feel these words are my thoughts at times...

Ten-Hut Desvelado!!!!! Don't you know to salute a superior officer when he comes in the room....

( Posted by: kilgoretrout [Member] On: March 26, 2008 )

Des and Kil
LOL to the whole thing

but in response to your "but sometimes causing them is half the fun." Des
i would have to say 'been there done that' and i am a failure lol...and my lack of success has lead me to my current state
i realized my personal feelings are better kept to poetry rather than actual human interactive expression (i dunno if theres a word for that thought)
perhaps its just spring fever ..who knows...but i liek the poem more than my current state of affairs

( Posted by: IcicleIcicle [Member] On: March 26, 2008 )

thanx
thanx again for reading and sharing your thoughts!!

( Posted by: IcicleIcicle [Member] On: March 26, 2008 )

Commander
and I’ve always had a problem with authority, too… and I've never been good at waiting... perhaps in that lies MY problem, as well as yours… ;) but passively waiting for karma to deal its hand and steer your course, that's not the poet's way, hu…? our way is the litter-strewn path of accidents/ mistakes and misadventures…

selfishly, I wish you many more of these… ‘cause they produce such mindful poetry. enjoyed this. take care.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 28, 2008 )





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