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At the shorelines
At the edge of simplicity and chaos
Where placidity is lost

Enter the frothing waters
Where bedlam churns with incredulity
Enter now…

Flounder in the high tides of infinity
In the riptides of curiosity
Swept away…

In the oceans of being
Where knowledge would have us to drown
In oceans existential
Exiguous survival
Where lungs and minds fold
In the pale airy depths


In a kamikaze universe
We are suicide pioneers of the deep

Targeting blindly the mind(s) of God

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The following comments are for "“The Cataclysm of Intellect (Drownings)”"
by ghostpoisonsturgeon

I wanted
God to have an (s) too, but that's probably a bit obvious, and probably just me...

think best conceptual metaphysical pairing here is "curiosity" and "infinity"- that just sings with rightness… I like too how I’ve never encountered a pale depth before…

not an uncritical fan of The Bible ;) but this did recall Ecclesiastes: “For in much wisdom is much grief, and he who increases knowledge increases sorrow.” Something like that anyway.


( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 19, 2008 )

thats it!
I actually did just read Ecclesiastes the other day, and the anguish incurred in the pursuit of knowledge is exactly what i was going for in this poem (along with a substratal sense of psychadalia, which i try to throw in alot of these, though maybe not so well...)

It's like drowning; entering realms of thought we do not really understand... but that's the way it's always been for the human race i suppose... intellectual evolution, obtaining gills, whatnot and soforth... thanks for reading

( Posted by: ghostpoisonsturgeon [Member] On: March 19, 2008 )

that's fine man
i can barely speel either. if it wasn't for microsoft words spellchecker my posts would be even more unintelligable than they already are...

( Posted by: ghostpoisonsturgeon [Member] On: March 24, 2008 )

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