Star
by Bradburyskin (Member) - published: March 21, 2008
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Category - Poetry
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Shine

like

a beacon
on the dark canvas
of the enigmatic.

Cut
the

darkness like a rain
of diamond,

glittering
with

lambent

resolution.
Shine

until

your

time is up
and you fade into forever.

------
Allan Onik

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by Bradburyskin

Enigmatic glow
I like the enigmatic and lambent resolution descriptives. I think those define very well how it is we view stars. I don't think the last stanza does the previous lines justice. It seems a little less poetic than what the final moment of a star should be. I wonder if you could word it in a slightly different way to lend a bit more mysticism to the bigger idea of starlight.

a very good poem though

BW

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: March 21, 2008 )

Stars in Their Eyes

You are the star
Of writing
No Icon set in stone
But gazing upwardly waiting
For a star to call
Your own ?

You can catch
Falling stars
Still warm to touch
Not alive in their days
Of Great Glory
As such..

Whoops I saw this verse as a description of xxx prime……. And thought… what goes up must come down

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: March 21, 2008 )

POEWHIT
In Viet Nam I would lay on my back for hours watching the stars. Then the meteors that flash. The heavens are a spectrum of wonder, a dancing show.

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: March 22, 2008 )

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