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Once upon a time in the western part of LAND. There grew from
the beginning of seeds, into saplings. The saplings were proud, filled
with great grandeur of state. Their green leaves shinned in a special
glowing manner. That of a twilight, that was pleasing and desired by
each sapling.
As the saplings grew, they found in the growing season, that the
sap and water of the roots made them euphoric in momentary stature
of shinning greens. The trees grew, and desired and waited for the
flowing of sap and water, to embellish the leaves. The leaves were glorious
to behold, to those in concert with the status of the now growing trees.
Soon the trees, started to become fixated and gain an added
addiction to the green status of size and stature. The trees looked
upon each other to see "who's leaves" were of the brightest green and
brilliance. In short order, due to competition, the trees almost
demanded the sap and water from the roots. The roots as part, gave and
received sap, as was deemed by cyclical time and nature.
Soon, the trees grew in panic state, to retain the brilliant glow of
the green leaves. They formed ways of keeping the sap and water. Not
returning it to the roots, for due processing, that was part of the cycle
of natural course.
The roots soon atrophied, and became small and wilted in short order.
The green vanity of the leaves, did not realize the wilting and decay of the
roots. Then one day a wind-storm from GOD came. With one great gust, all the
trees of green leaves, fell to the ground.


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SCRATCHES ON THE PAGE,
MAKING NOISE


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The following comments are for "THE GREEN TREES"
by poewhit

the green status of size and stature
Like the allusions to human behavior in this story. You seem to have a knack for these nuggets of logic. I would only caution you to spend more time on the structure of your story.

Campfire stories are different from stories written for mass consumption. I don't claim to be an expert on anything - just sharing info from courses I've taken.

You're good with poetic turns.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: March 19, 2008 )





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