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Have you ever wanted
To curl up in a ball
And then we you unrolled
You would begin to fall

You'd fall back in time
Back to when you were young
Just sitting in a garden
A group of friends you'd be among

You'd not have any cares
Nothing would really bother you
You felt free, no worries
No real plans of what you should do

I often think about the fact we
All just let this time pass so fast
And then waste away the rest of our time
Wishing we'd made it last

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The following comments are for "Time"
by ~H~

Good points,
I enjoyed your poem on time. I think on line three you meant when, but it would be too close to then. On the first three stanzas, the sentence didn't wrap to the next line, but on the last one, the first line ends with a hanging "we" and continues to all.

I did like the image of curling in a ball. It's beats my idea of just waking from a fog and reliving a few parts of my life!

( Posted by: captainkeyboard [Member] On: March 19, 2004 )

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