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Why what do you mean disintegrated dreams?
well you know exactly what I mean...

The dreams of a young girl pregnant; with all that she dare dream for a future unseen but hoped for...in her mind, then she becomes disconcerned and unalarmed of her potential and her own worth that she gives birth by lying on her back...and know she can only dream for the child she has to raise...alone

Why what do you mean disintegrated dreams, well look a here , look a here...that man, that wo-man so caught up and lost in his or her fears that he/she drinks it all down...smokes it all up and ends up in jail he/she done gave up...

His/her prayer reads; what the hell might as well...sell sell sell and settle for less cause he/she aint worried about sundays' best and scriptures or hymes...

So he/she spends-he/she spends himself/herself into a frenzy
thinking about what he/she could've been and what done happened already...cause he's/she's scared fear done gripped him/her to his/her soul...the boy/girl the man/wo-man child done been spoiled...

letting some man/woman carry him on her/his back...

What do I mean disintegrated dreams?

yours...

------
LMJ


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The following comments are for "Disintegrated Dreams..."
by LMJ

when i was young
i wanted to be a space pirate. that never happened. damn it...

( Posted by: ghostpoisonsturgeon [Member] On: March 12, 2008 )

desvelado & ghostpoisonsturgeon...
Thank you desvelado, for the comments, ghost; it's not too late they do have cyber space pirates! you can log onto! I wrote the poem in spoken word form, because thats what I do "spoken word" I can hear the words in my ears as they appear on paper, it's never a; let me sit down and write type of thing...it just flows from places I've been or seen.

I'll take you up on that advice though!

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: March 12, 2008 )

Winchime...
Thank you for the warm welcome!
It's good to be back, I plan on dropping a few lines up & through here from time to time as I look forward to comments by: the great windchime!

LOL! I've missed you girl!

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: March 13, 2008 )

posted comments on this poem transfered to this page by author LMJ....
urban legend part deux
OK, I now see this as a performance piece. I forget that not everyone writes the same. Thanks for the myspace message.

I opened this thinking I would read a revised version. Glad you chose to leave it as is.

Would love to see you perform these pieces.
( Posted by: desvelado On: 03/13/08 )

Disintegrated dreams
Yeah I totally see u in front of the mic reading this fast and with angry desperation and i dont even know what u look like...I just know this is a good poem and I should totally stop using the word totally...
( Posted by: kilgoretrout On: 03/13/08 )



( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: May 28, 2008 )





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