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I miss you, living life without you is like going blind
The colours are messed up, chaos in my mind
and i miss you, my world is spinning off the hook
and id gladly put an end to it, you know i would
but theres no poing in going to heaven if you're not there
I love you...
winding your fingers slowly in my butter hair

I miss you, laughing makes me want to break down and cry
Happiness is a distant word without you by my side
I imagine lying next to you watching my life......
...... as it plays away, playing to the beat of the song you made

and i miss you, Loving you is a luxury im afraid to take

Father is the man that will not dare to think
that his daughter is in love with the poorest thing
" he has no money no job", and yes i do agree
but "i miss him daddy"
I miss him, silently.....

Mother is woman of enormous pride
My child, there are many men to stand by your side
theres the banker, the lawyer and even a prince
" yes, i know mum"
But i miss him silently.....

And as the years fly by, ill remember your face
Mabye we can find time before its too late
Find time to prehaps sit down and kiss
Kiss you slowly.

How ill miss these simple things..

Like the ring upon your little finger
the shyness of your smile
The bit of your hair that always sticks out
That funny little face you make when you want me in bed
" Marry me forever" were the words you once said.

ill spend the rest of my life thinking
of the world that doesnt exits, where we have a family together
and we live off ice creams and sweets
Ill spend the rest of my life wishing that id said " yes"

Spend the rest of my life wishing id married you instead.

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The following comments are for "Miss you silently"
by Shaza89

as a poem
this could perhaps use some restructuring, to make it more accessible and reader friendly, and to establish a rhythm that would really allow your words to sink home...

as a testament to a personal sorrow with universal breadth, I think this is both beautiful and articulate, tender and full of regret.

I concur with Lucie, heartstrings played with harmony, thank you for posting

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 8, 2008 )

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