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I watched her wring our
Washing out
Red rags to
Sun’s bull

She taunted the world
That matador morning
In battered shoes,
The heels worn down
The liberator of her people

As dexterous with clothes line
As a fisher in his rigging
And equally at sea
Just as predisposed to drowning.

She captured me
Surely as I had jam-
jarred beetles
Caught me by
Imagination’s short and curlies

In the sun-streaked yard
Where domestic prehistory
Pushed between
The pie crust concrete
She sang to me an old song:

We once had owned expanses.

With the language of her hands
She told to me her soul
Is not this thing that stoops,
In a blue headscarf behind
The outhouse

It is not the
Burdensome serenity of
Mother Church

Or the nucleal ache
In the swell of the heart

It is that which
Redistributes her weight
From sagging shoulders
To muscled claves

She carried the world, then
Like a curate’s egg.

On a good day
My mother
Seemed to have stations of stars

One at each elbow
And knee

In darker times her hair hung
Between the daylight and
Her purpled face
And she excelled only at
Aloneness.

In the yard
Wringing washing
Was a good day

Her laughter undid doctrine
Her nature perfected
Her grace.


------
The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for "Washer Woman"
by AuldMiseryGuts

Shannon's ma
This poem is descriptive of all those too short moments we treasure from our childhood. Made me miss your mother as well.

She must have been perfect.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: March 6, 2008 )

the way you write
Thanks for the commment on Born a lion, I swear shannon, they way you write. Its literally like teleporting from my chair sittin at the computer screen into your world. Almost uncomfortable suddenly finding myself there....but soo thrilling at the same time. Cant describe.
I love the words "sun's Bull". how did you come up with that, im not sure i fully understand, but they sure capture.
" burdensum serenity of mother church."- mother church...wow....linking of mother nature with god...
Incredible how the image of this woman changes through the poem, its like you dont even notice, but in the end, its as if ive known her for years.
Like time traveling through a relation in a matter of stanzas.
Theres always beauty to be found i say.
:)
love your work always

( Posted by: shaza89 [Member] On: March 6, 2008 )

supposing truth be a woman...
Francisco, thank you kindly. there is a companion piece to this, which is perhaps the other side, one of the "bad days". you know, I don't have a complete picture, 'cause there were so many mixed and conflicted feelings, 'cause she was a complicated person and she wasn't always honest. one think I am sure of, though, is that she loved us, and that we loved her... and that we still do...

Shaza, thank you. it's my pleasure to comment on your work. I know you're a writer who will use the feedback she gets and make the most of it, and your work is always worth commenting... I am glad this was able to transport you, and to move you in a less physical way too, that means I did poem's subject some justice, and that's the most I can really hope for.

thanks again. best to you both.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 6, 2008 )

POEWHIT
Beautiful poem of your mother, very heart felt - stoic

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: March 6, 2008 )

Shannon's universe
"station's of stars"..Indeed.

"jam-jarred beetles"..brought back memories..

'truth'...being relative..

Real is best..

Enjoyed,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: March 6, 2008 )

mom
moms are great...i had two from 7th grade on that was awkward but still good... not so depressed anymore...kinda hoping to see somebody fall down some stairs or something...nothing can chase away the blues than watching some well dressed douchebag with a briefcase falling down a flight of stairs....

( Posted by: kilgoretrout [Member] On: March 6, 2008 )

Washer Woman
Wish I could do what you do Shannon, that being writing fit and proper tributes for those you love most, like your little brother and mom. I fear to tackle it, even for my Kevin, I mean I know I've said a few things about him, but I would like to write his heart and soul so you all could see, and you would love him as much as I do.
One thing that came to my mind, a memory you jarred loose about my mom, when you talked about her battered shoes, was my own mom, standing outside by the clothes line, in rubber boots, a long too wide skirt, and my dads' coat on, getting ready to decapitate a chicken for supper, whose feet were tied to the clothes line. Not a pretty sight I suppose, but one I thank you for bringing back to mind. Robert.

( Posted by: robnjop [Member] On: March 6, 2008 )

thanking 4 more
Poewhit, thank you for stopping by. as to stoic, she was, I'm not, although occasionally I can give that impression...

Bobby, real is best. indeed. thanks for stopping by. best to you...

Terence, glad you're not so depressed anymore. I feel down the stairs the other night, but I'm not well dressed and I didn't have a brief case... you'll just have to visualise it... ommmmmmmmmm...

Robert, thank you… babby brother equates my poetry writing with inside-outiness… the raw emotion is always there, takes a deep breath and usually a skinful of something strong to access, words arrange themselves with practice…

decapitating chickens reminds me, Aggie used to “karate chop” rabbits, to break their neck before skinning. used to amaze me how she’d get them to hold so still and calm, and then crack… it was kinder that way, I suppose… thanks for sharing these memories.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 9, 2008 )

Shannon on washday
Ahhhh! The wringer washer... Clotheslines made of rope that needed bands of old white torn sheets on them before hanging clean clothes...

I hang outside the minute it's plus 4 Celsius without snow and up to the minute it isn't, anymore, usually April to November around here although this year, not so sure...Been clotheslining consistently since 1985 and miserable intermittently in the ten years prior whenever clotheslining was not possible. And before that, clotheslined from the minute I could step on something to reach the line...

On a windy day, when things dry in 20 minutes...wow! Don't get me going, but this is probably the one and only domestic chore that gives me true pleasure.

There is soul in hanging clothes out on lines to dry. IMO, anyway. There are towns in Northern Quebec where clotheslines are in front yards (but here in the city it's all backyard).

You get the soul of washday, Shannon. Your Mom was the soul of washday. So happy I saw this before it slipped off the front page.

No burdensome serenity in clotheslining, either...When it flies into the neighbour's yard and you cautiously open their gate to retrieve it...

I wanna hang outside!!! The snow in my backyard, however, reaches the clothesline, therefore...

Thanks Shannon for for a poem on my pet domestic weakness

Lucie


( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: March 9, 2008 )

Lucie
woo-hoo! here's to the spirit of washday, hu? so glad you caught this poem, and that this poem caught you ;) once had clothesline out front of flat on balcony in Kilburn, walked in to that and got a face full of sopping cotton many a less-than-sober evening. still think flapping clothes on line are beautiful as kites of birds. thank you for entering in to the spirit of this... hope the snow recedes soon.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 10, 2008 )

Strength...
Your mother was a survivor and very strong, I can see her in your poem and hear her in your voice, the agony and pain the tiredness and yet sense the mellow calm of her...soft and beautiful...mm and full.

great write!

( Posted by: LMJ [Member] On: March 10, 2008 )

LMJ
sorry I missed your comment and generous rating before. thank you so much for feeling to fullness the spirit of this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 20, 2008 )





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