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The pain of eating loved meat, i can't descibe
Like feeding off the carcass that once kept me alive
My lover wasnt born a lion
and if you're not a lion you're prey

I feed off him sobbing my way through joints
crying at his weakness, but im triumphant in my game
My instinct is strong, he doesnt know
The girl he loves so much, can never love him so.

I wipped my dripping gore and combed again my shinning hair
My lipstick covered the red of blood; the evidence of my crime a kiss away
Neither god will judge what happened here
So Claws retracted i prowl away

My first kill'My trial initiation
I was born a lion, and at 19 of age i see my mane
A woman hunts for bigger game



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The following comments are for "Born a Lion"
by Shaza89

good to read you again

good to read you again shaza. this piece has meat in every conceivable sense ;) … the visual’s are stunning, but their vividness is combined with a blunt and brutal sense of this-is-just-the-way-things-are…

a dramatic poem this, and captures the horror (and maybe the magnificence) of a coming of age in a very visceral and immediate manner.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: March 5, 2008 )

Born a Lion
I'm a little confused but that is not at all unusual. I read it like you are his girl, and you are using him, but you care enough for him that it just kills you that he is not the one. But still you just use him. I don't know, but I still think it is good writing. Robert.

( Posted by: robnjop [Member] On: March 5, 2008 )





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