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Too many times,
Have I experinec this,
The feelings of failure.

Failed a test,
failed at life.
Failed to talk.
Failed to act.

Failed at being a boyfriend,
Fialed at keeping determination,
Failed at keeping myself in line,
Failed to express myself.

Failed at trying,
Failed playing jmusical insturments,
Fialed writing things i wanted to write.
Failed to keep my dreams and goals in sight.

Failed to keep promises,
Failed at learning,
Failed to study.

Failed asking for help,
Failed with relationships
Failed to surpress the pain.

The list could go on,
Like santa's list,
it would be very long,
But it is shroudded in a mist.

Too many times
When i ingored the signs
It has overtaken,
but alas, i am slow to awaken.

I became sad and depressed,
My world was filled with stressed,
And became shades of grey,
all i wanted was to fade away.

I see laurance has had your heart,
from the very start,
he got that poem on that red and pink day,
alas, i have nothing i can say.

Just like a whisper in time,
with a vaule that of a dime,
i will fade away
because i had failed to behave.

My mind is now plauged
Heart has been crushed,
Failed to keep,
Now just a pile of dust.

YOu're a failure,
Completely worthless,
Fated to be alone,
says a small voice.

But...

What did you say?
I failed to hear,
You seem to have lost your way,
Voce that is my fear.

I found someone,
who is like an older sister,
One that would listen if i need to talk,
but my words fail me once again.

I am not worthless,
I will fail no more,
I can be helpful,
Till my body becomes sore.

I will show,
That I am worth to use,
And not to be fired.

This be my first job,
And a sever i will be,
I will not fail thee,
Nor your creditablity will I rob.

I failed to keep my hope,
But hope is a stubborned one,
For it has not failed to keep me.
So i will live till i can find it again.

You will fail at this job,
Just like you fail at everything else,
The small voice quietly tries to scream.

Words are worthless,
Actions are not.
I will not fail,
But live to tell the tale.

You trust me,
And I will be a hard worker,
I will fail,
To be a failure anymore.

I wil fail to get depressed,
For any pain can be surpressed.
I will carry on,
For more vaule i am than in the ground.

------
We adore chaos because we love to produce order.

"Death is light as a feather, duty heavier than a mountain."
Lan

"The best plan lasts until the first arrow leaves the bow."
Matrim Cauthon



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The following comments are for "I have failed"
by Maneskinn

I have failed
Listen man, you ain't no failure, you just haven't succeeded...yet. I don't want to sound hard to anyone, but girls are a dime a dozen. And girls that don't really care about you are a dime a gross. I'm not talking about wives here, but girlfriends. I know you like her but unless you are "laurance", she doesn't even care that she publicly humiliated you here man. And I'm not saying that, well, maybe she felt she had to, to make you understand. I'm not saying one of you is right or wrong because I have no way to know that. I'm just saying, be glad you know she doesn't care for you, and six months from now, you will despise her. It will get better, and to borrow what Shannon once wrote, and is very awesome, remember, " a bright day pursues me". And credit for that line goes to auldmiseryguts.
And listen, my comment that girls are a dime a dozen really only means that there are millions out there, many just waiting for you probably. I didn't mean to cheapen or say that girls are worthless, what a drab place this world would be without girls. Believe me, you wouldn't want to spend a lifetime just looking at people that look like me, uh uh.

( Posted by: robnjop [Member] On: February 23, 2008 )

i have failed
i know im not a total failure, but it is just too easy to just look back and think on all the negative stuff. bout halfwayish through this poem my resovle to not let my failures rule my life came to be. the "failed to hear" part is where i bascially say that. but i dont think that i'll ever despise her. everyday is a good day, you just have to make the best of it, someone once told me that, and im going to try to look at life like that.

( Posted by: Maneskinn [Member] On: February 26, 2008 )

I believe you failed...
...to run a spellcheck through this before you submitted it didn't you?

I thought the first half of this poem was very good. The constant repitition of 'failed, failed, failed' is very powerful. For me however the second half was a trite long and almost bordered on angst.

Still the first part was very good.

( Posted by: Emlyn [Member] On: February 27, 2008 )





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