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(looking out)

It's one of those hushed days,
when raindrops silently
gather in puddles
which whisper invitations
of solace and reflection
to searching eyes,
peering from windows
in warm silent wombs.
Or tombs.
I'm not quite sure yet.


(looking back)

Every time I see you smile,
I smile back like it was yesterday.
You, still in your childish muscle flexing pose,
knowing how very well I would approve of these antics.
Knowing how very completely you owned my heart,
knowing it was yours to do with as you willed,
even then,
and you only five.
But never were you easily unkind to it,
and never willingly.
Only as you grew up a man and it was either, in your mind,
be that man or be another.
Times you had to be true to yourself
and not to my visions for you.
Those times hurt,
but we all choose them,
we all must,
ourselves over our fathers.
My heart you held son,
and the tenderness and thoughtfulness
with which you held it,
amazed me then,
amazes me now,
and I am forever in debt.


(looking for)

It's been a cold winter,
cold and wet.
With rains' sad dronish pattering.
Too cold to stand in,
too quiet not to enjoy,
too empty to care.
Cold rain doesn't raise up flowers,
it simply washes away the very promises it brought
but could not keep.


------
Robert J. Hall, thankful "Pa" of Kev and Dave.


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The following comments are for "Mute Reflections on a Quiet Day"
by robnjop

looking out, looking back, looking for...
and looking in, which is where this mantra inevitably leads. this, I know…

there is an incredible sadness here, as if poem was trying to make sense or find meaning of / in its constituent parts, and on its search runs the full gamut of emotion… philosopher John Stuart Mill said of poetry that it is “feeling confessing itself to itself”, which is a definition that’s always stuck with me…point being, that if any poem falls in to that category, then it is this one. thank you for the honesty and intensity of this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: February 19, 2008 )

fathers and sons
This is poetry. I'll tell ya, Robert, when I read your first poem I thought you were good. This proves it.

But I am at a lost for words in describing how this makes me feel. I think it's to do with having grown up without a father.

But I will give it a try...

Not sure which of your sons you wrote this for. I suppose it could be about either - or, perhaps, even both. Regardless it's a beautiful sentiment bookended by words that evoke a real sense of belonging to the moment.

You make fatherhood sound like the greatest job on Earth. I made a decision long ago to not have children due to my own fatherless issues. But reading this poem makes me wonder what it would really be like.

See what you've done, Robert? You're making me grow up!

Will keep you posted...

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: February 19, 2008 )

Des and Shannon
"feeling confessing itself to itself”. That is quite a thought there Shannon, and when you think about it it seems to define it quite well doesn't it? The only relation of these three things were just that they were where my mind wandered on the same day. I was here alone and I don't remember ever a more silent day in my life. A good, calming quiet. You and Francisco are so kind to take the time to read and to comment so nicely. Thanks. And I want to say that it is both of you and a few others like windchime that really make this place work. We all write because we are compelled to do so for whatever reason, but I am sure we all post it here to to be heard. And I know I am horrible at commenting and very sporadic so I am not getting on to anyone, I am the guiltiest of all. I am just say that a few of you make this place work. And Francisco, fatherhood is the greatest job on earth, and you, I have no doubt, would be one of the most caring Fathers the earth ever saw. You're both gems in my book, and thanks again. Robert. (and there are many more who comment a lot, please don't think I am neglecting anyone. time constraints and all you know)

( Posted by: robnjop [Member] On: February 21, 2008 )





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