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I am all out of magnets to hold a note
so I took a fly strip, cut it down with scissors
and attached it to the back
and stuck it to the icebox.
It was a little tricky.
I hope the flies don’t mind.
I broke a rose-patterned plate today.
How can I replace it?
I do not belong in this kitchen when you are away.
I feel like an alien.
I have watched you wash and rinse a million times
without so much as a slip.
I awoke and rose to snow before daylight
when the moon full and bright made
the shattered field shimmer in my sight.
The rye grass and turnip seed I planted
came up and stuck through just enough
to show till noon until more warm snow
covered it all.
I shuffled slide slush outside twice
to call the stray but his tracks
led away past the tool shed after some cat,I guess.
Do you remember the tamales
from the Mexican Bakery in Moses Lake?
We are so far away from there
and all I have to eat are these cheap canned imitations.
McIlhenny’s made them palatable.
I am out to Shattered Field to corrupt angels in the snow.
I’ll be there awhile flailing my arms on the ground catawampus with my leg.
Come and gyrate beside me when you get home.
We will touch feathers together all the while.
By the way, I hit the side of the icebox
and it kicked in.
Working right now.

PS. Maybe we could have snow ice cream tonight.
I found the vanilla.
Is there really radiation?



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The following comments are for "10th Note on the Fridge"
by williamhill

Radiations from shattered field
Charlie,
When first read one of these 'notes', nearly 3 years ago, was thrown a bit..Didn't quite get into it. Then, after a few, started to get feel...Today, when saw a new one was posted, went right to it.. Glad.

If we all penned in same stlye, it would be like watching network tv. Boring and uninspiring.. Thankfully, these notes are neither.

Enjoyed,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: February 2, 2008 )

there is
something absolutely poetically pitch-perfect in the lines: "I am out to Shattered Field to corrupt angels in the snow." says much about man’s absurdity in face of loneliness… there is a child-like, clumsy longing throughout this- not that the poem’s clumsily executed- but that the rudderless, ill-coordinated feeling of being without one’s better half comes through loud and clear, appealing to all senses and to all levels of longing, divine/profound & domestic/ banal… all are equally as important…

always a treat to read a poem from you, you’ve got poet’s poems, my friend. best to you.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: February 3, 2008 )

noted
Ah, but you've never had tamales until you've had my mother's tamales!!! She refused to make them this past holiday season but I think it's all part of her master plan to make us enjoy them that much more this year.

This "note" is a wonderful read. Full of insights and love for the person this note was penned for.

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: February 3, 2008 )

Another note, Charlie!
Oh!
Never thought I'd see another fridge note from you, and so happy there is one, even if it's a long time since the last.
If I remember, you pretty much always refer to the shattered field, and then Shattered Field, once in the lower case, common "ground", and later in the upper case "sacred" ground, and making snow angels on sacred ground is a rite rather than a ritual. I loved that aspect of it.
I think "warm snow" is one of those things that if you don't live where it snows, you don't get it. If you don't live where it snows you think all snow is cold. Not so. The Inuit have several dozen words for snow.
It occurs to me now that the actual fridge note is not the poem but mirrors the poem, leans in to it somehow, wants to become it but never does, much like the shattered field isn't really Shattered Field, only virtualy.
I can go on and on about how much I get from these fridge notes of yours. This one is particularly apt at revering ground and roots and comfort.
Thank you!
Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: February 3, 2008 )





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