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This should set poetry back 1,000 years...but you know me...I'm a rebel and gotta do my thang...Kacee

Used to be a hot tomato
Guys wanted me on their arm
Now I'm just a couch potato

Never was as smart as Plato
My smile was full of charm
Used to be a hot tomato

Rid myself of that Scorpio
Thought I'd buy a chicken farm
Now I'm just a couch potato

Years ago when no meant no
Guys never did me harm
Used to be a hot tomato

When nature calls ya gotta go
Having trouble keeping warm
Now I'm just a couch potato

Listening to oldies on the radio
Forgetting to set my alarm
Used to be a hot tomato
Now I'm just a couch potato

------
Kacee Huggs


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The following comments are for "Are You Ready For This...Villanelle"
by Nitz Kitty

The pink tomato
WOW!!! I never thought I'd get a ten ...I was thinking more on the lines of taking a beating...Maybe I wasn't a red hot tomato ...more like a pink one...thanls Pen for your comment ...coming from you made my day...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: January 29, 2008 )

Kacee in pink
Enjoyed read and pics..

B

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: January 29, 2008 )

Villanelle...
This is very cool. I just noticed your other (dada) piece. Sorry I didn't get to it sooner. I am distracted these days with limited time like everyone else it seems. I am going to go check it out right now. Again, I like this piece here very much.

Blessings;-)

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: January 29, 2008 )

Bobby, Lena, Eric
Lena,
Thanks for stopping by to read and comment...Kacee

Bobby,
Glad you liked my pink frock and poem...Thanks...Kacee

Eric,
I think I'll get me a walking stick...oh wait, I have one...now to the beatings...No Eric, I wrote this to be funny...Thanks...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: January 30, 2008 )

Kacee
oh, Kacee! the you-ness of this is resounding! this was an absolute hoot, and I applaud anyone brave enough to attempt the villanelle challenge... God knows I found it difficult enough. you make it look so easy! and itís funny too.

love this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 31, 2008 )

Then and now
Lucie,
I want to thank you so much for your comment ...I'm an open book and read so easy...Another Villanelle came to me in my sleep last night...It's not my fault...I'll blame the muse...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: February 2, 2008 )

POEWHIT
BACK THEN - thought I was JOE NAMATH with all the glitter, bars, girls. Read the BIBLE now - alot safer and and COMFY.

( Posted by: poewhit [Member] On: February 5, 2008 )

Give me the Bible
Thanks for your comment Poewhit...Doing a lot of that myself lately...more fulfilling...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: February 5, 2008 )

i almost missed
this one. it's a lovely example of what Poetry is all about. i am raising my coffee cup to you as i write these words (which is no easy feat). thanks for furbishing my day.

j.jd.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: February 6, 2008 )

wonderful villanelle lesson
Hey Kacee - this villanelle of yours is one of the ones I chose when I posted my poetry formula lesson on this style. I think it's a fabulous example of how cleanly crisp and witty a villanelle can be!

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 15, 2011 )

love it
girl hot tomato my side hurts from laughing. From a former stud turned layz boy wonder. Thank you

( Posted by: Anowara [Member] On: December 28, 2012 )

Randy
Thanks for liking my goofy poem. Haven't been to lit in a while. Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: December 30, 2012 )





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