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lyt pype,
blo smoak,
so hy,
hot hight,
iys water,
so kold,
hol lofe,
black bred,
so ful

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by Seanspacey

not sure
I need to ask: what is happening here? It's defying my attempts to interpret it. Yes, I worked out that it's written phonetically, but even then I'm still left scratching my head a bit.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: February 12, 2003 )

to Seanspacey
The world of chemical high..I do love the double meanings and the mixture of images it conjure in my mind.

e.g. lite pipe, light pipe, inhale, in hail(ice rain), in hail(to greet/praise someone), blow smoke, blue smock, blue smoke, hot height, shot height, is water, ice water, so called, so cold, black bred, black bread, so foul, so full..

Very, very nicely done.

But a question, did you do it on purpose, or did you just try to phonetically spell everything?


( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: February 13, 2003 )

my purpose
I didn't intentionally create any double meanings, nor did I just spell everything phonetically. Many things I could have spelled more phonetically are non-phonetic. My point was that you can communicate clearly without standardized spelling. Each time I came to a word, I asked myself what the best way to spell the word would be if I were to design the word. I would also point out that the poem contains heavy alliteration and assonance. Also, none of the grammar is conventional.

More and more, I'm experimenting with doing away with the rules of language and just trying to communicate clearly.

( Posted by: Seanspacey [Member] On: February 14, 2003 )

re: seanspacey
Though evidently, your communicating clearly turned to mysterio in my head.

I still prefer to think you purported all the meanings though :p

Keep experimenting, this was fun to read.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: February 14, 2003 )

Read and liked it
I can't offer any critique, but I liked it. It was fun to read aloud and is very re-readable.

( Posted by: ae [Member] On: October 8, 2003 )

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