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Damn I remember that night like it was yesterday
The night your life was taken away
That day I went over to yours
Knocked on the door
You opened it & damn, I still remember the cheeky look you wore
You said "get your stuff, tonight we're going out for sure"
Haha you were always looking to get high, always looking to score
That night
We hit up a few places
Mingled with people, recognized a few faces
We left the last joint at around 1 o'clock
We were still buzzing with happiness, so we decided to walk the block
I can't remember the car creeping up
It happened so fast
Maybe if we had been more alert we could've missed that first shot
That bullet shot out of the barrel with a rip roaring blast
I remember letting out a sharp gasp, falling to the floor my eyes tightly shut
I heard a few more shots being fired
Then the sound of screeching tires
I open my eyes and looked around
There you were, just a few feet away from me on the ground
Motionless, not making a sound
All I could do was watch as the cold gray mist of death
Clouded your eyes
Then I heard those pitiful, mournful cries
They were soon drowned out by police sirens, ambulances and other noise
I was told later that those mournful cries were made by me
One day I'll be strong enough to go and see
You lying silently in your grave
It might give me some of the comfort I crave
All I have left of you are memories filled with happiness and love
And the hope that you're smiling down at me from up above.

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