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the reason seems less important,
then it did the night before.
and it seems i acted stupidly,
when i threw you onto the floor.

the shouting sounds somehow louder,
to my "morning after" ears.
no wonder i feel drained,
after shedding all those tears.

i went far beyond the line,
when i slapped you in the face.
and i guess i didn't mean it,
when i said i'd leave this place.

why were we fighting last night?
was it worth this pain?
it's different in daylight,
and it never seems the same.

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by man eating maniac

you've got a very good flow in this piece. Every line is tinged with regret and feeling which is generated as much by the rhythm as the words themselves.

( Posted by: Spudley [Member] On: February 6, 2003 )

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