cowboys
by mercer102 (Member) - published: December 17, 2007
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Category - Poetry
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A cowboy is only a faggot in chaps
With his kitschy butch clothes
& his gay cowboy hats
& his brokeback tendencies
he keeps under wraps
oh, a cowboy is only a faggot in chaps

A gangbanger is only a faggot who raps
With his fubu pajamas
& backwards ball caps
in the crib with his homie
with whom he secretly naps
A gangbanger is only a faggot who raps

yes, cowboys , gangbangers and faggots and such
I think they all doth protesteth too much
People aren’t always just as they appear
And there’s worse things to be than a little bit queer

A Christian’s a faggot who frequently kneels
& thinks god’s on his side
throughout all his ordeals
& he lisps his “amen” before all of his meals
but he’s only a faggot who frequently kneels

my boyfriend’s a faggot & it’s alright by him
with his casual denial
of original sin
spending all of his time at the bars & the gym
oh, my boyfriend’s a faggot & it’s alright by him

yes, christians and boyfriends and faggots and such
sometimes they don’t care ‘bout protesting so much
People aren’t always just as they appear
& there’s worse things to be than a little bit queer

------
J

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The following comments are for "cowboys"
by mercer102

jeff's cowboys
Gutsy use of language here and for me, the message in this poem is clear: worse than queer is politically correct. THAT, I get! Probably because I have zero tact and diplomacy. I don't do politically correct. I do blatantly honest, so this poem and I bow to one another. This poem and I do not gut-kick one another.

"Political correctness" sets up such boundaries as to turn perfectly good people into fakes and phonies. Or is "fakes and phonies" too politically incorrect for here as well?

I've met one too many queer Catholic priests in my lifetime not to thoroughly appreciate this poem.

I believe the tone you use here is more observant than judgmental. Also, I sense that the poem itself doesn't care one bit about how offended any one reader might be. I think this poem knows that it pushes the envelope. I like the balance between disillusioned and imaginative.

I like the sonorous effect of repeating the first line at the end of stanzas. Scansion and rhythm are both very well attended to in this.

I like the progression of this, the effect of "pseudo"-stereotyping, grouping and regrouping "types": it gives the reader an impression of benevolent tolerance, rather than condemnation.

Rhymes are many cuts above the humdrum life/strife we always see: Kneels/ordeals/meals is good, and the "almost" rhyme him/sin/gym is even better, as it permits the narrative to flow.

"People aren't always just as they appear" is probably what my nose gets rubbed into most often in this life...

Thank you for posting this.

Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: December 18, 2007 )

faggots
I agree with Lucie that this does not come off as condemnation but rather benevolent tolerance, and I think I get it, the message here, that is. Very original and bold, something akin to what one might except from say, stand up comedian poetry of Dave Attell or an adult Dr.Suess.
Hey, some of my best friends are faggots and I love them dearly, and I know they would not be in the least bit offended by this poem, it is definitely a pun on political correctness in my view, and I like that. I like the rhyme too, good job of it.

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: December 19, 2007 )

Good flow
It has a good, even flow and the discriptions are pretty entertaining. I don't get much of the message -- of course, it is obvious what the message is, but what I mean is that it is so rhythmic that the meaning or message doesn't have much weight to it.

It is still very entertaining and I enjoyed it.

thanks

bw

( Posted by: BWOz [Member] On: December 22, 2007 )

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