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You get used to seeing in silhouette

Giving names,
Not to colours
But feelings

You exist between
Different shades of red

The relief-map world
Tired and unfamiliar

The strange geography of sleep
Where outlines absolve themselves

Of yesterday’s crude solidity.

The funeral procession
Strikes defiantly North

Losing the profane sun
In definition’s ending

The frontiers come meet
Their dead half way

Receive them with a sky
Wide open.



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The human race, the only race I know where everybody loses.


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The following comments are for "a beautiful sky, the drive to Belfast"
by AuldMiseryGuts

drive to Belfast...
haunting and beautiful twist in outlook/perspectives;-)

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: December 14, 2007 )

Drive to Belfast
Was this written for Old Man Killoughry?

Beautiful as only someone with eyes wide open can write. This poem is full of lines that force one to sit up and take notice. You are a true poet, dear friend.

Will have to add Ireland to my European trip next year...

( Posted by: desvelado [Member] On: December 15, 2007 )

Fairplay
Hi

Would that be down the MI and along the Donegall Road or are you coming in via Aldergrove down the Whiterock Road past the cemetery...

I know you would find some poetic inspiration in "Battle Scarred" Ulster

Eric

( Posted by: Fairplay [Member] On: December 15, 2007 )

Shannon driving
In this, boundaries are peeled like onion layers might be, to the tune of tears...

There is no cartograph-iable geography here. It is all as volatile as life itself.

And as wide open.

Amazing, this!

Thank you for it.
Lucie

( Posted by: windchime [Member] On: December 20, 2007 )

Mog says
Lena, thank you. I wish I had your technical savvy, then I could post the pics that went with this... but I think, in a sense, it is better to leave the view as boundless as the imagination...

Francisco, correct absolutely on the first count... although its only looking up you find beauty here...

Eric, my cousin Mog, who doesn’t have a sentimental bone in her body, left the following comment about said poem and pics on my MySpace blog thing bit: “not shown: skaggy "leisure" centre, mentalist traffic calming, dilapidated/ defiled graves and slack-jawed fucking tourists!” which I think answers your question ;) … she also says that sky is cheating, because sky is always beautiful… but I reserve my right to use and abuse my artistic licence at will… thanks for looking in

Lucie, “boundaries are peeled like onion layers…” I couldn’t ask for more, my friend, thank you...

once again, belated but sincere thanks to you all.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 29, 2007 )

Belfast Piece
Very enigmatic poem, with a twist. Poem written with precision. Poem radiates with power and mystique. I feel dissonant and augmented chords ringing through this poem.

( Posted by: FireFly747 [Member] On: December 29, 2007 )





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