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Loam Squish

She is today
Saskatchewan cold
Nape of her neck
Italy ankles
Raw as wild onions
Left combed
By the flood

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by Flonigus

So elemental and evocative of exposure, this is, it’s like a cold wind hitting you straight in the face… there’s an undercurrent of desire here too… I think…

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 7, 2007 )

Thank you Shannon & Lucie
You are both so keen in your perceptions. I am honored to be read by you.

Yes, Lucie, this one fermented for awhile before I took a spaten to the foam and drew clear amber liquid.

There is, however, many a shimmering piece in your own work, both of you painters with words. A poem is when we let go of it, I guess.

( Posted by: Flonigus [Member] On: December 12, 2007 )

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