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(My first and last Sestina)

The mansion stood upon the shadowed hill:
a dark and gloomy massive place.
Many years it stood in emptiness,
said to be an evil haunted house.
No one entered because of the curse:
"All who enter, will remain forever."

Seems the mansion has been standing forever,
built by the Cherrys of Chester Hill.
The family was under a long-time curse;
massive yard turned to a barren place...
Darkness then spread into the house:
rooms filled with unfathomable emptiness

built for Maria, eyes wide with emptiness.
Word has it she will dwell there forever...
She searches for others to lure into the house,
that monstrous, evil house on the hill.
All cross the road to stay clear of the eerie place,
afraid the air around it is poisoned with the curse.

Maria Cherry's blindness was her terrible curse:
shell of a woman , heart echoing emptiness,
bored and unloved , she despised this place.
She felt like a prisoner, banished. Forever
alone in her ivory tower, on that somber hill.
A hermit's existence in that gloomy house.

No patter of children's footsteps in the dusty, old house:
being childless was part of her curse.
Nothing could live or prosper on that depleted hill...
Destined to be alone and live in emptiness:
this was her fate in life, blighted forever.
She turned to the darkness inhabiting the place.

Her young husband built the place;
died before he could finish the house...
She never remarried, stayed widowed forever.
Living in sorrow and loneliness was her curse:
no more to love or be loved, filled with emptiness;
never to hear the laughter of children on Chester Hill.

Beware that fallow hill and evil house!
Enter not the emptiness of that dark place
or you will remain there forever, under the curse.

Kacee Huggs

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The following comments are for "The Cherrys Of Chester Hill"
by nitz kitty

Kacee, this is great stuff! wonderful to read a post from you again, and very glad you turned your hand to this sestina... really impressed you managed to sustain a coherent narrative throughout, my own attempt fell apart completely, but this is like a well-turned Halloween tale of old... creepy... but just a little sad. very atmospheric. great stuff.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 7, 2007 )

Kacee's Spooky Sestina
I agree with everything Shannon said above and then some, including a this KICKS creepy BUTT! Good work, Kacee.

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: December 7, 2007 )

Thanks to Shannon and Lena,
I guess that was the year my muse traveled back in time to visit Edgar Allen Poe...I had this sitting on a shelf waiting to be published in an online mag...but it never happened...I think the mag must have gone belly-up...I just found it again and thought Why not...I want to thank Pen and Lucie...they helped me a lot...I don't ever want to do that again...too much like work...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: December 7, 2007 )

The Cherrys Of Chester Hill
I never knew what a sestina was until I came here. But what I want to say is that you must be an artist indeed to follow so many rules of writing and still bring out art, which you did. All the feeling and eeriness intact. My favorite line was,
"eyes wide with emptiness". Robert.

( Posted by: robnjop [Member] On: December 8, 2007 )

Lucie, desvelado, robnjob
Thanks again Lucie...Without your help , I would have never posted this...

desvelado...Thanks...I can get really creepy at times....and yes, Lucie and I are true Lit Sisters ( blood isn't always thicker than water).

robnjob...Thanks for your kind words ...I am no artist...I don't know where the words come from....Dreams, Muse? Who knows...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz kitty [Member] On: December 10, 2007 )

Thanks for your encouragement on this sestina ...I would have never posted it if it weren't for you and Lucie...
Congrats on your publication...I remember J.R. from the writing forms...I commented on his poems...called him R.J....I thought it was funny , don't know about him...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: December 17, 2007 )

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