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Standing amongst these daisies
Fingers of tissue and silk teasing every sense
As if to smile every bone from being,
Standing on the sidewalk at dawn
Whilst people sleep away nightmares
And daydream away dreams,
The wind brings me home,
Standing on that cliff
Where no one can see but me
The endlessness of the sea
And see the sea’s breeze
Which whispers in this ear,
Standing upon the hill
Where all the dreams began
Between two lovers, two children
Two lives entwined
But now forgotten
Where the daisy chains once grew.

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C.lynagh


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by C.Lynagh

"As if to smile every bone from being"
so good to read one of your pieces again, and this one is infused with such longing… it allows the reader to drift above the everyday world where people seem scarcely awake, or alive, and connect with something more primal, more real, the memory seeming clearer than the “reality” of the nine-to-five… which is often the way, right?

this poem appeals to the senses, those opening lines being superbly tactile… makes me miss home, and look forward to getting the hell out of London very, very soon ;) … also it seems like a great testimony to the power of memory, and its ability to transcend great distances in time and space, and reconnect us to places it is sometimes essential that we go… sorry, rambling, enjoyed this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: December 5, 2007 )





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