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My tears of pearl white fly your tracks of why, and circle around to hit the floor...

So many objects to pass into your stream I must go, my blood is yours… rushing for that drive...

My tears now red, jump to the bitter ocean, braid the Anker as the silk clouds fill my crystal cups...

M~



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The following comments are for "why and circle..."
by M

Matthew's poem...
Matthew, it's so good to see you posting again ~
Sorry I missed some of your last postings but I was really busy and not able to come to the Lit.Org at that time. Still busy, but I am making the time to come and read and comment here because I don't want to see this site die from lack of participation. I think what happens is that people lose interest and become discouraged when no one cares enough to comment on their works, for many people post and post and post their writings all the time, but they never bother to comment.

Anyway, back to your poem...like I have told you in some of your other postings; your style to me anyway, is very Zen in its presentation, and I love the simplicity and flow of your works, this one being no exception...but I have a question as to why you capitalized the word "Anker"? Is that someone's name? Is it the German automobile? Or Or is there a significance and play on the word "anchor"? I particularly love the line;

"as the silk clouds fill my crystal cup"

Beautiful~

Blessings to you, Matthew, and I look forward to reading more of your works;-)

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 30, 2007 )

so glad
to see you posting here again... this, to me, is a very sensual, physical poem, and segments sinks the desire deeper... there is an elemental/ cosmic aspect to it too, where the fluids of the body join those of the Earth... as Lena has said, a very Zen interconnectedness... beautiful, as always... thank you for posting, hope to read more.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 30, 2007 )

Tears of pearl white
This is beautiful. A little slippery, a little elusive, but all the more subjective for it.

Absolutely loved "So many objects to pass into your stream I must go, my blood is yours.."

Must confess to a chill or two from reading this. Thank you much.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: November 30, 2007 )





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