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29 suns
swell forth from your body
issuing histories that blur readily
and worries that stipple my skin
Lovers'sins and your own distillations
Desires that speak for themselves
Beginnings that could outlast us all
Your ears, nose, tongue, eyes-
they see the world at an angle
of finest minutes or grand morosities
Your particularity constrains lovers
of a lesser kind. Never tepid
You my dear consume moments
like the madwoman in the attic
Fiercer than sunsets.
You defeated me.
I have become Mishima's Mrs. Kaburagi
Even today I shiver with uncommon awe at
the canvasses you paint and discard like pips

You are my muse...



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The following comments are for "Shakti's song for Thea"
by Shakti

"Fiercer than sunsets"
this is amazing. a tribute as much painterly as poetic, and told with such passion... almost visceral. appeals to all the senses, this does, and opens up vistas of colour and light. goregous, one of your best, in my unqualified opinion. the best to you.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 26, 2007 )

hola
Shannon...thanks for always commenting on my work...i really appreciate it and your opinion is highly regarded by yours truly. Indeed, this is a bit of a paean to somebody. Have a good day!

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: November 27, 2007 )

songs, Shakti
I have read several of your poems recently. I have greatly enjoyed them. I love the edginess of them. Reminds me of Seattle work. Capitol Hill type stuff. Good job.

williamhill

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: November 27, 2007 )





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