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Sometimes I awake
to find my fingers spread
palms pressing
on an empty stomach

pressing the softness
and tracing lines called stretch lines

Then I remember
Because my hands remember
those who have dwelt inside and lived to forget the story
and those who dwelt inside and were removed surgically
so that I would have a breakdown, a meltdown, a letdown

knowing that it will never happen again since I tied my tubes
And my sex life now is just that- a sex life.
Shop doesn't assemble those toys anymore

Then I remember before when it was closed
Before the births
Before the grand opening
When my vagina was tight
and my tummy was taut
an ornament fit for a snake dance

Just like yours are now
daughters of mine




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The following comments are for "The Facts"
by greatsmile

this
is almost unbearably harsh in its dedication to the full and frank truth of things… a worthy poem, for that alone… when reality is harsh, sometimes honesty needs to be brutal… although, I also sense a resignation to the way of things, that although the facts of life might be harsh, they aren’t cruel… they just are, something to be faced, accepted… eventually… or am I missing the point… not being a woman I can’t possibly understand this the way a female reader would, so feel free to tell me I’m talking out me arse…

there is some very adept and original use of language here, although I’d be tempted to suggest a few more line breaks in the third and fourth stanzas to allow the rhythm to flow without any snags… other than that, good stuff… thanks for this candid piece.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: November 14, 2007 )

Thank you
Thanks for your honest comments and compliments as well. I thjink you are right about the line breaks but i would not know where to put them. It was an honest and unexpected writing of a poem. Thank you.

( Posted by: greatsmile [Member] On: November 21, 2007 )





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