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She wrote her name on a kiss
That she gently placed on my burning forehead
Marvel of shape her hair briefly touched my face
While a tropical storm was ravaging a distant beach
I am dancing with my death under a red moon
I thought while holding tightly her cold hands
Itís a smell of frozen flowers melting on baby skin
Dilated thoughts started to fall silent all around us
As a million cells marched towards a new dimension

- Iíve never noticed your tattoos before
I said while caressing her pale skin, covered by glowing symbols
- I can see right through you, your grandfather was handsome too
She said with a melting smile on her shining face
- And I always thought the constellations were mere letters of a frightening name
- You are burning too fast, this world will end soon
- I was born screaming, my words are not enough for you
- Someday when youíll be ready, I will open my eyes and let you see
- My flesh and blood will be our wedding bed
- Donít forget to wash your face in starlight
- Who put this dead bird between us ?
I screamed while falling through a comets tail

The sand was soaking wet with rain water
And the palm-trees laid fallen on the ground
Forming a perfect circle around me

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The following comments are for "Venus Andromedae"
by Paradox

This is decadent poetic fair, rich and woozy and replete with gorgeous images, almost cinematic in the vistas it createsÖ well textured poem.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 30, 2007 )

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