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Maybe I should focus on finding
A true friend
One that takes my hand
And takes my breath
But with all these flickering lights
It's hard to see
Hard to decipher what is fake
And what's reality

And maybe these heroes are not true
And maybe these knuckles are not bruised
They just remember what my eyes
Forget what they thought wasn't right
Are these lies or fucked up truths
Maybe I spoke to soon and I said

(Chorus)
I breathe in, I breathe out
My hands up or they down
I whisper in a shout
Wash this dirt from my mouth
I feel broke can't be fixed
I feel so damn sick
Am I safe, am I tricked
String me up just for kicks

And now my lips are drying
No water
I gave up that free right
For my order
I can live for a few days
Quietly
Or I can last for mere hours
Still screaming
I choose the latter of that
The glass half full
I'm willing to leave that mark
Even if semi-viewed

Now choose your sides wisely I advise
It's hard to switch once you decide
I stand here on our guard
Carrying no firearms
Guns pointed at our foreheads
With beads of sweat I strayed

(Chorus)
I breathe in, I breathe out
My hands up or they down
I whisper in a shout
Wash this dirt from my mouth
I feel broke can't be fixed
I feel so damn sick
Am I safe, am I tricked
String me up just for kicks

I feel the blood rush to my head
Sudden unexpectedness
As my hands clasp in fear
I hold my prayer in this
Awful and anxious
Remaining anonymous
Our names aren't important
If we're being open
At least I have my health
When bruises aren't to swelled
I'll spend more of my days
Beginning to say

(Chorus)
I breathe in, I breathe out
My hands up or they down
I whisper in a shout
Wash this dirt from my mouth
I feel broke can't be fixed
I feel fucking sick
Am I safe, am I tricked
String me up just for kicks

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I am life as we know it. I have no use for a name. I am a reject, all and all, I am a reject.


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The following comments are for "Breathe In, Breathe Out"
by lifeasweknowit

I can't breathe
The beginning was very good. The flow was good some nice rhymes going... I like the chorus, but I feel the entire thing seems a bit wordy, ya know? Sometimes 4 words are better than 8. I've had this problem too and I realized sometimes the simplest things work so much better.

And I really do like the chorus, big fan right here!

Keep on writing.

( Posted by: cheesebergr [Member] On: November 27, 2007 )





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