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Annabelle and I
Walk together
In the rain

She steps with me
Left foot first
Right foot follows

Why do we walk like this?
She says to me

Maybe we can skip or
Splash in puddles.

Letís have fun with our feet today!

Weíre always so boring
Youíre getting old

And what about the Apostles
Didnít Jesus
Wash their feet?

I nod to her
I like Annabelleís
Rain boots

They keep me from running

Kicking
For something greater than
Little Annabelle

Her questions and accusations

She is Love out here
In the pouring rain


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"Soul of my soul of the soul of a hundred universes,
be water in this now-river, so jasmine flowers
will lift on the brim, and someone far off
can notice the flower-colors and know
there's water here."


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The following comments are for "Annabelle's Rain Boots"
by IcicleIcicle

Thanx Fairplay
Thank you for sharing fairplay!
i am happy you could connect with my piece
My Annabelles are actually the name brand of my rainboots haha..
and so i began to dream a bit and came up with this piece

( Posted by: IcicleIcicle [Member] On: October 25, 2007 )

Annabelle's Rain Boots
I said I would never comment on a poem, but I guess it's ok as long as I don't talk about structure and cadence and whatever else I don't understand. This moved me so much, actually brought tears to my eyes. And now I find out it's your rain boots. You will look back on this someday, when you have your first little Annabelle, as a prophetic sort of thing. Remember then too, your insight, take time to like her rain boots then, let them slow you down and keep you from running for something more important than her (job, money, housework, whatever). My favorite poem, thanks. Robert.

( Posted by: robnjop [Member] On: October 27, 2007 )

Thank you robnjop
I really appreciate your comment Robert. I dont understand the forms and styles of poetry either, i write just to get thought and emotion out there in the universe.
It means a lot to me to know how deeply effected you were by this piece.
Thank you for sharing.

( Posted by: IcicleIcicle [Member] On: October 29, 2007 )





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