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I word your whisper, I smell your smell.
My bed's your bed; my hair your pillow.
My cheeks are damp with kisses you blow.
In my bed - our bed - I want to dwell.
I am a slave stunned of your spell.
Now as I watch the ocean below,
You're in bed staring at the window.
Your cheeks are damp with tears, I can tell.

You dance my dance, I back your back.
You bread my breasts; you nibble my nipples.
I filled the fridge with milk and apples
You won't need me, the body you lack.
But I am your raft, you are my rack.
This separation will be brief and
Your tongue will taste the taste
Of my milk. Promise, I'll be in haste.
I'll be back in three days so I can
Word your whisper, smell your smell.


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The following comments are for "Connected"
by Jabeelah

Breastfeeding and being sexy
Thank you for commenting desvelado. This is actually for my one-year old daughter whom I am breastfeeding and who thinks that she owns my body. When I'm breastfeeding, I feel sexy and important. But not erotic. :-)

( Posted by: Jabeelah [Member] On: October 15, 2007 )

Connected
This is beautiful. At first read, I thought nibbling nipples was an odd thing for a lover to do (I'd most likely smack anyone who tried), but otherwise read it as a lovers poem anyway.

On second read, it all made sense and I was left with a small smile.

Thanks for this.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: October 16, 2007 )

awe
those opening lines are gorgeous. beautiful poem, just beautiful, has a slumberous, intimate quality to it... captures the combination of primal/ ethereal in the relationship between mother and child… reminds us what us men are missing out on… a unique and potent bond, eloquently evoked. thank you for this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 16, 2007 )

Dancing Back and Back
I am only half the dance...
until you come dancing back

( Posted by: awhippingflame [Member] On: June 10, 2016 )





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