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And Beauty was all that lay in the heavens between us
Our world, so wonderfully complete
The tips of your fingers caressing mine
the silence that shelled this place
where love and warmth grew,
with no interuptions from the outside.
Our hearts were pure
Intense love that drugged me into a deeper state.

So beauty reigned
so different from the world we grew,
our nest kept away all things unwanted

We found the special glue,that holds the skies
and skies holding a light so pure.

i hold your hand
i hold your hand in mine
will you marry me?

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The following comments are for "our world"
by Shaza89

"the silence that shelled this place"
this is bold and frank in its declaration of love and beauty, so calm, almost meditative... so nice to read this from you, a change for the chaotic decadence of others of your posts... not that you don’t write that well, only I read this and I found myself sighing… breathes deeply does this, and takes its time… lovely.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 10, 2007 )

I'm getting sappy
First the 'Gay Marriage' poem that made me think of the famous line 'make love not war' in an entirely new light, and now this that made me shift comfortably in my seat and sigh some more...

I'm turning into a damn sap!

Thank you for this. 'the silence that shelled this place' is such a gorgeous, stirring line. My heart needed this.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: October 11, 2007 )

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