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searching for that moment of clarity,
ive stumbled upon more than i imagined
and judged more harshly that i would myself.

where i should have been drawing parallels,
ive taken to carving divisions
and placing blame.

for my wrongs are as bad or worse
but as sure as death,
theyll never be regrets
because they are crafted from love and sincerity.
so they may not be right and they may cut you to the bone
but they are of something bigger than you or i.

so i must respect the reciprocal,
and acknowledge your love dwarves me
for it could be no other way.


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The following comments are for "searching for that moment of clarity"
by joeyjoejoe3

Ah...
Spoke to me in volumes. I really enjoyed this, the places it went, the well of love and sincerity that wrongs sometimes spring from being larger than 'you and I'... and found myself nodding at the conclusion this comes to.

This is very nice.

My only suggestion would be to put apostrophes where they're called for and either use capitalization consistently or avoid it altogether. And those little things are just the nit-picky, anal-retentive side of me speaking.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: October 11, 2007 )





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