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Worthless
By Z.###.

Caught in the haze
This unending daze

Reeling from this
Reeling from that
Reeling from you

I’ve got sirens…
Going off in my head
remember you said.
“I wish you were dead!”
so now I’m careening,
off the edge.

reeling from this
reeling from that
reeling from you

spinning in circles.
reamed by you.
you got me running,
running for nothing.
gunning for something.

got my life summed up,
in just two words.
you said it yourself
“worth nothing.”
Got that?


------
i am a misuderstood lunatic


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The following comments are for "worthless"
by schindees

Reeling
frenetic pace of this is appealing, relentless, rhythmic and lyrical, short, sharp and to the point.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 9, 2007 )

Got that?
This poem dives headlong into bitterness, twists and writhes and rolls around in it, and then touches bottom just to make sure the one who said 'worthless' gets the point.

I have a special place in my heart for bitterness. Thank you for touching that.

People who accuse others of being worthless are often just lashing out at inadequacies in themselves. It's not your fault you can't fill the void in them.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: October 9, 2007 )

improved spelling
Fantastic! I see that your spelling has MAGICALLY & GREATLY improved since you first started posting here many moons ago...as I recall, your spelling was so bad that many then questioned your motives and legitimacy in posting here at the Lit.Org, and as I recall I think one member, was so offended by your constant misspelled posts (a high school English teacher) that he went off on a tangent regarding what he considered to be an insult that you posted such poorly constructed and misspelled works here in the first place. That was quite a while ago, and obviously you've improved by a magical measure, or at least you are using spell check. Good for you, Schendees* Now, about this worthless nonsense stuff, sorry but I don't buy it, not for a single moment, and I know you don't either...but you've got what in my opinion amounts to some not so bad song lyrics, good repetition and rhythm.

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: October 9, 2007 )





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