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A broken winged
Bird flying
It’s the ugliest
Saddest sight
You might ever witness

Flying frantically
Banging around
Falling down

Catastrophic
Like any airplane crash

Put the poor thing
Out of its misery
Is the first initial reaction

There is a desire
To murder in us

To watch her fly
Seeing the pain
Scarier than any hunter
And his gun

There’s no point in living
Little birdie
If your wings cannot fly

Come down here
Bad omen

Let me fix you
Sleep peacefully
And fly in your dreams






I know this is very morbid...sorry! but i really did see this bird :(and it really was a bad omen...if you believe in that sorta thing

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"Soul of my soul of the soul of a hundred universes,
be water in this now-river, so jasmine flowers
will lift on the brim, and someone far off
can notice the flower-colors and know
there's water here."


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The following comments are for "Little Birdie Bad Omen"
by IcicleIcicle

Icicle's Birdie
Reminds me of several instances that I never once thought of as poems waiting to take wing.

This is chilling and strikes a chord. It is real and takes the reader's mind through a defined thought process.

Loved this:

"Put the poor thing
Out of its misery
Is the first initial reaction

There is a desire
To murder in us"

Because in a sense, it juxtaposes mercy killing with outright murder.

Gave me goosebumps, Icicle. Genuinely reflected and absorbed and loved each word (except for referring to birdie as bad omen - if it weren't for your A/N that would have made me tilt my head and go 'arroo?').

Thank you for this.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: October 8, 2007 )

heart of darkness
found this chilling it it's implications, "There is a desire/ To murder in us", how can we be sure, that this instinct we call mercy isn't a darker desire to do harm...? that's what this line seemed to be saying, it did to me anyway, but then, I'm dense...

I wonder too about what makes the injured bird scarier than a hunter with a gun? is it those very feelings it awakens inside? to put something "out of its misery"? to cause death to a living creature?

an intense poem... the title suggests that the injured bird is an omen in terms of being a harbinger for the darker side of human nature... and it ends on such a strange and sympathetic note. on the one hand there is sleep and peace and an offer of aid... on the other, the rest of the poem has left the reader in no doubt as to what "fix" means, and that death can viewed as a "fix" is disquieting…

so yes... a chilling, disturbing poem... I liked it a lot.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 8, 2007 )

Thank you all!
Thank you for all the comments I really enjoyed reading them and appreciate the response!

It is nice to get a response on a darker piece.

The school didnt publish my piece this month...i am ASSUMING it's because of the bizarre summer like weather we've been having in NY ha ha....maybe in november's issue??

Besides the bird i saw...I was also influenced by a scene in Willa Cather's A Lost Lady...it is a scene where a young boy (18yrold) slits the eyes of a woodpecker just to prove his prowess over the creature and the surrounding wilderness...THAT scene was extremely chilling to read...so i cant claim 100% originality for that

Sorry i didn't respond sooner...i've been really busy studying for midterms!

But thank you again!

( Posted by: IcicleIcicle [Member] On: October 19, 2007 )





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