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There she was with that red shawl in the wind drawing me to creation … the tree of weeping purple dropping its flowers in the mist.. oh how it s killing me softly...

You look like a goddess to me, as you move me like a woman should, its not hard with the wind is it…

M~


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by M

"illing me softly" .....by M
Cinematic they say? Yes, if so, then what I see is some special effects by direction by Zhang Yimou, such as in the movie "Hero", yep, or even better, "House of Flying Daggers"...

You've obviously created some great visual images here, this is beautiful to contemplate...and ahh..the cherry blossom of love;



"the tree of weeping purple dropping its flower"






( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: October 5, 2007 )

[killing]
my OCD self freaks when she typos.

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: October 5, 2007 )

Synchronicity rides again!
I was about to make the same “House of Flying Daggers” comment as Lena, but she beat me to it. Cinematic, sure is the word of the day here, ain’t it?

What got me most was not the visuals, however, but the elemental empathy of the last lines, how the environment is drawn in to the courtship, becomes both an extension and expression of the two figures… gorgeous.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: October 5, 2007 )

this
is a wonderful poem. simply. wonderful.

john.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: October 5, 2007 )

Dropping flowers
Can only echo the breeze of compliments here, hoping that it shakes from your branches more purple flowers.

( Posted by: chinadoll [Member] On: October 6, 2007 )





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