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Pollinating the canvas with color
in our youthful splendor, as we
chastise the gods for this
barren wasteland, that can
stand no man’s apathetic valor;

whilst the thousands shy away from
growth in a post-
traumatic, stressed generation,
amidst the veneration of stogie-
laden cockneys riding the
breeze; and
I say,

“there are no meadows here,

just a fine mixture of sandy clays
and clayey sands
muddying the shoes of our youth.

There are no meadows here.”

-jonathon shank


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The following comments are for "Muddied Pollination"
by huntingjonathon

"apathetic valor"
I pondered a while over this and couldn't quite figure it out... but then I'm thick ;)

to me this paints a picture of a dispossessed generation disappointed by so-called heroes who paint a vision of the world that does not match up to the reality of being young in a place where there are no meadows...

even close? enjoyed

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 10, 2007 )

perfecto

sounds like you got it to me

nice

and thank you so much for the constant stream of reviews

jonathon

( Posted by: huntingjonathon [Member] On: September 10, 2007 )





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