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I thought I knew
But you had know idea
As I had no right to wonder
Of that smile tattooed on your back
She kept on walking and walking still
Blinding me with the ignorance
I was suppose to feel
As she tangoed over these feminine curves
Perhaps womanly descent would protect
More aptly from those eyes and smiles
You both seem to perfect so effortlessly
Leaving the beaten
The bruised and the honest person
In this threesome
Only me


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C.lynagh


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The following comments are for "Deceit"
by C.Lynagh

Deceit
Yes!

this, I loved. I loved how the tattoo was complicit in deceit, a femme-fatal keeper of dangerous secrets, conspiring in this “womanly descent”…

I loved too that you write the you had “know idea” rather than “no idea”, it suggests the poem's you was all too knowing, yet perhaps oblivious as to the affect of her knowing on the poem's I…?

I loved the sense of disappointment in being left beaten and bruised and honest... it's the feeling of exclusion, so well distilled here...

perhaps I appreciate this more being heavily tattooed myself and knowing several heavily tattooed women? I have the Virgin Mary on my back and my ex has Joan of Arc, she used to say they conspired together while we slept ;)

thanks for this, fantastic.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 9, 2007 )





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