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As fat drops of rain jiggle- pelt
Metro Manila's blackened snakelike
spit-ridden streets and
puddles gurgle like infants
into gratified sewers-
I ask myself why am I
saving you from the lover
who brands you like an animal;
Why do i stand on streets
warm with people and their juices;
Why do i wait for you
in a makeshift market
frothing with vicious sellers
and strays begging for scraps
Disjointed- i feel lost here at the corner
where cheap bread renews itself
inside glass cases.
I need need to- need to run.
But then I saw you- walking towards me
in a tormented fashion...

It is too late now.


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by Shakti

Pelted
"puddles gurgle like infants"- wow! "Why do i stand on streets/ warm with people and their juices"- wow! "where cheap bread renews itself/ inside glass case" - wow! ... and that last line... yeah, you guessed it, "wow!"...

you must know by now that I'm a fan of yours, and this is one of the best I've read in a while... the scene is drawn with a detailed vividness that is almost Dickensian, and completely submerges the reader... I think the blending of external environment and internal/ emotional/ psychological environment of the poem’s “i” is very well done indeed… thank you for this experience.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 9, 2007 )

Dickens
thanks for the wows... i love Dickens and recently Rushdie...the vivid imagery in any of their writings makes the reading experience very satisfying and textured.

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: September 11, 2007 )





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