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"thanks."

the word eaten by wind
as I hold the heavy door
turn to catch a whiff
of brunette and hazel
and grey wool and
iPod

young young young
slight and slightly
curved

for less time than it takes
swung glass to shut me in
her out
I forget my headache
my debt, dead, day

in scent
in vanilla
in baby powder
something something something

something young

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I blog irregularly at TinkerX. I'm also on Twitter. @andyhavens, go figure.


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The following comments are for "Passing"
by andyhavens

Chemistry Response
Woosh...Andy, this is very erotic...creates a perfect visual picture and feeling of that thought...made me feel like an intrusive receptor to your synapse moment.

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: September 7, 2007 )

Of Debts and Desire

Ha! And here I was imagining this at the door of a deli, thinking all this was about the consumption of desire... nice take on the wind, Lucie :)

Very nice poem, Mr. Havens. I enjoy your moment poetry and especially your detailed sketches. I don't think you've written like this since you first started posting at Lit...

( Posted by: hazelfaern [Member] On: September 9, 2007 )





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