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Shirking the sty hurt his back
And you bent over to stop the pain
Forgetting the puddle of mud
Circling your designer shoes.
Lapping between calf and glue
Like sand and sea it wore away
The inches of truthfulness.
You dabbed with restraint
Trying to soak every last drop
Of yesteryear’s midnight walk of shame
Or love
Depending from which eye.
I always stumble through
Lashes of turquoise and green pebble
Dashed dreams that grab each lase of
Designer shoes and toss them beyond
Yours or mine or his or hers.
Silt and dirt scrape your ankles
Stain those khakis
But I forgive
And you forget
As hands trick those into the clarity
Of daydreaming in the puddle of crystal clear mud
Lying beneath that shoe.


------
C.lynagh


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The following comments are for "Shirking the sty"
by C.Lynagh

for me
the most telling lines here are "But I forgive/ And you forget". true of so many relationships, I think, those mismatched acts of compassion that make bad situations worse...

I see the figures in this poem picking over the obstacle course of debris and muck produced by a life together… trying to avoid said muck is a fruitless task…

I like how this poem appears like a linguistic Rorschach test, something that transcends narratives and plucks at the emotional core beneath… I will be sure to return. thanks for this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 6, 2007 )





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