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Kisses between fools
of nations displeasured
by dreams
of dreams not made,
by street merchants raining
sunshine utopias
by only a few,

and they sue to save
the rest
before the masses construe
their displeasure with
promises forgot,
we all thought

our best interest
was at hand;

coin over coin,
of folly, dystopic folly,
building in the sand,
juxtaposed to sea
and to sand,

sand and to sea –
not seeing anything
before the monarchy that feeds

to fools.

-jonathon shank

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by huntingjonathon


the language in this interests me a lot. for a start there's “actualized” which always reminds me self-help pseudo-speak, then there’s the clinical/ technical sounded “construe” and “juxtaposed”… I think this language is just right for the process this poem describes, which seems to be the systematic devaluing and dismantling of anything of any real worth, and substituting it with greed and commercial fantasies, selling the idea that the only way to achieve those woolly “sunshine utopias” is to screw over your fellow man…

it interests me too how both utopia and dystopia are presented here… utopia is somewhere between a distant dream and a marketing ploy, and dystopia is the grim reality… I particularly like “dystopic”, ‘cause it reminds me of “ectopic” and all this word suggests…

packed with ideas, and packing punch, this poem. thanks for this.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 6, 2007 )

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