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You are my sunshine, my only sunshine

She sat on the bed, cradling the baby, singing to her. Calming her. Reached out one arm, flicked on the computer.

You make me happy when skies are grey

Volume down, don't attract attention. Wait, watch. She entered that state of mind common to those who cross their morality for what they see as the best of reasons. Reluctance, nervousness, determination, release. Release at, finally, being able to act.

She had to know.

You'll never know dear, how much I love you

A symbol. One she did not know yet hauntingly familiar. Cold, dark, metallic yet filled with life and terrifying strength. Something she knew yet had never known.

She held the child close. Yet could not tear her eyes from the image before her.

So please don't take my sunshine away.

She jumped. Did not need to turn. Him.

What is it?
It's what you want.
And what is that?
Something beautiful.

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http://twothirdsleft.wordpress.com


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The following comments are for "sunshine"
by JonnyT

something beautiful
the sense of some diabolical, brooding presence hangs heavy on this story, and the last line sends a shiver down the spine... I sense several possible scenarios that might be unfolding here, none particularly pleasant, all drawn from the dark side of life... you do creeping unease very well...

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 3, 2007 )

like auldmiseryguts
yes, and i'm wondering about the use of the heavy text. it gives me a shiver, and doesn't apologize for being uncomfortable.

( Posted by: wendythemommy [Member] On: September 3, 2007 )





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