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Between the cracks
Thimbles trip
Each accidental footprint
Stumbling the careless
Making them forgo
Those dove’s eyes
Which drew down the
Splinters of rays
Beating the cement into
Forgiving the accidental footprint
Of each downtrodden trajectory
Between the cracks
Where children smile below knees
And above ankles
Never knowing the likeliness
Of tripping upon the harshness
Which is there for all
Bountifully between the cracks
Old and new.


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The following comments are for "Fracture lines"
by C.Lynagh

"downtrodden trajectory "
what makes this poem interesting- for me, at least- is the mixture of pity and contempt that resonates for those children who do not know of the likeliness of tripping... mixed, perhaps, with a desire to return to that state of blissful ignorance, not to be aware of one's place on the downward curve that dooms us all from time immemorial... though I could be reading this wrong… there are always so many emotional layers and textures to your poems, like onions… fascinating read, as usual…

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: September 1, 2007 )

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